smz the vocab was nice andcreativity wasalso pretty hot..
i thought the rhyme scheme was good..probablycuz i write similarly..
good imagination and just take the cridict as just that, a cridict..the flow was hot kid..

oh and TIMELESS that picture is fricken halarious..looks like uneed to put that gun down, cuz, holdin' all crooked, looks like ur ganna shoot ur'self..no diss to u, but tkae how ever you want.

good verse smz

peace