Yo I spit ill, so challengin' me is gonna get you killed
But still, it's hard for you to chill
not feeling this opener... it isnt much of punch, and doesnt have that good of a libary
Cuz my homies r out there to make u thrill
I'm gonna burry you alive, so you betta decide
more like a filler.. doesnt really hit with a punch.
where you gonna hide cuz I'm not gonna be kind
I bet you doing just fine, layin your ass down wit your face under sunshine
... see above bars... You really need to focus on punchlines more
But then suddenly an explosion, you flying round in the air
You've been hit wit a sensation but does anybody care?
no, this comes off as FILLER, off subject and not a punch, with no real metaphor/b]
Your bitch cryin with her hands in her hair, sayin it isn't fair
But i'm just wondering what does she wear?
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This is just borin battlin against Rappin' Masta
Bet he sounds like real disasta
weak punch on the follow through
Haven't got the skills to write fasta
You're bout to be hit with bullets comin from my baretta
self boasting and filler shit
Or be prepared to be stabbed by my stiletta
I really think this masta shud blow a dick
weak attemp at a personal
He's gay after all, cuz he raps like shit
Don't have to think about givin me a lick
weak punch... no metaphor your lacking alot of strength
Cuz i blow you away, just gives me a kick
This battle is over, dude your verse is gonna have to be sick
ending is weak.. but its alright.. not much in the way of punching.

You really lacked on your punchs, you need to focus on your direction then work on personals and build up your strength.. After that your going to have to work on your metaphors, then build a rhyme scheme.




The world has had enough of Daffer22 finking dat hes the next eminem, hes soundng like a 12 year old girl on heluim,
weak opening, weak punch, metaphor could have been better
u try and hit on girls by putting them on a cd,
just coz they all reject you, but not me,
sort of works against you.. weak bar i thought
Ur acne and ur unwanted facial hair,
makes u a relation to frankesteins creation,
basic diss.. sort of weak but i like the concept
so dis guy is in the D.E.D crew instead,
by the time iv finished with you, his crew will definetly be dead,
aiight personal.. punch needed a little more strength though
Just like a curtain, u need sum1 to pull yourself together,
afta iv ended my verse, ull be scarred forever,
set was nice.. good metaphor punch was eh... Follow through was filler type ish
This guys an expensive chocolate, hes from belguim,
but just like the chocolates, he aint yum,
i dunno dog.. i like chocolate.. i mean dont you? lol this punch was an alright attemp
ur new to da business, u got a lot to learn,
im closin in on a victory, which way r u gonna turn?
alright follow through.. Not much of an ending, the metaphor was decent

over all your punchs were there and they werent, you needed more direction in your verse i thought. I liked a few of your concept and i thought you needed a little bit bettter rhyme scheme.. metaphors were decent..

vote- Rappin' Master
I thought he just had better punchs and came off with alot better metaphors.. FLow was on there a little more.

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