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Old 02-06-04, 12:06 PM   #12
MeNTiLL
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Damn Pot .. I haven't read nething from U in a while .. And this piece is so much better than the last piece I seen U wrote a while ago .. Ur elevatin' into a dope writer so quickly .. This piece had a sicc ass rhyme scheme in it .. Multi's were dope .. I liked the concept behind this piece .. U executed your ideas very nicely in this piece man .. It seemed well thought out and was nicely written .. A lot of quotable but I narrowed it down to 3 ..

Sedative Blurbs Exist When someone's Emotion is Expressed
Yet theres no Expressed Emotion, With Devotion in Process

The Nights Lasting For Eternal With A Noctornal Pony About
Thats a Night Mare, I'm In A Terrace And Its a Lonely House

I Cant Afford Attire, Meanwhile everyone else Loves Clothes


I felt those were the deepest and truest lines for you in this piece outta the bunch .. And those were my favorites .. Very nice .. It's good to see U elevatin' man .. Mad props on that .. Keep writin' .. One
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