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Flyweight
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IP:
Flow - pretty good, with the longer lines you used it becomes easier to ensure the proper tempo. One thing a few lines didn't seem to actually rhyme. ie:
The climax impacts upon this very moment, I'm living a dream
How can someone I've never spoken to mean so much to me
Introductions were absolute, I felt I knew her before this summit
The very entity of my dreams, I was already equipped to commit
- I guess this one could work depending on how you say it, but it's a stretch
Sealed with an undying vow, my fragile heart is now potent
“I love you unconditionally and this love for you won’t end”
- Again a possibility but requires some serious accent.
Vocab - did what you wanted.
Concept - Have to agree with CainSin but I suppose about half of humanity might like it.
Overall - 6.5
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