Word. This was ok. A little work on the wordplay that you had would be nice. It really flowed easily. I got the message that you were trying to get across. A little basic but it was decent.

I know people are going to tell you to get more complicated or use multis, etc etc etc, but fuck that. Do what feels right to you. Everyone shouldn't write the same. Just keep progressing at what you do.

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