ok you had 2 totaly different topics the first topic is somethin i myself wouldn't spit on i mean it's cool you got the imagery there but you really didn't finish on that part of the song you ended it by goin on to the next subject of you pickin on nerds oh shit my fault there's 3 different subjects which the last was your drug use, you might wanna make those 3 subjects into 3 different verses and to help the rhyme scheme make the vocab a little more complex as of the bars strengthen those and do this piece again
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even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun