edicius- this piece was very emotionally driven. I think you worry too much about your lines lining up perfectly, because you use & instead of and....which is awkward looking. I think you misused a few words too("conceal"). is fiduciary a word? Yoru writer's voice was fairly strong, and you had some good vocab. nice work.

penskills-very dope my man. your piece was just as emotionally driven as Ed's, but I think you put more description into the relationship between you and the chick. You combined slang with wicked vocab ("flyest metality") and it made for a cool contrast that makes your style unique. Not bad at all dude.

Nice collab

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