nice piece here.....both of you i thought captured the topic well.....daz had some nice multies in there.....vocab was well planned....well written....the imagry was nice to.....u had some really good lines....like "fate with destiny's erasers...............razors..." sick i like that part...structure was decent.....flow very good...
straight had some nice lines too....consistency was good from both....your structure was good too....vocab good....imagrey decent.....overall...it was a good piece from both of you...i liked it ...7/10.... keep droppin....good job

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