ayght, its better than my first audio, i'll give you that. work on your delivery, try flowin more than talkin. get your tshit together b4 you put it down, listen to it a few times and work it all together so the track flows like a song and not just "an audio"..

could be worse, but it seems like you got somethin to work with. dont give up though, especially based on what people online tell you, because everyone just wants to be the best, no one wants to be the best, so they dont care about those who are still uppin