Brethren had some good punches : PiTcH Black, with all them capitals, were your hands shaking when you wrote?,
Dust off your verse, like for prints, while I cover it with 'baking soda for quotes', dis is good and funny,, like it.....Brethren had good structure and kept line da same lenght witch i like....flow was prety elmentry tho....<work on it ok..
Pitch black ur verse was pretty week....very few punches witch hit.....struture was basic but da flow was ok......it was ok 4 a newb but u were out classed by ur oponent...
v/Brethren

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