it was an open poem... telling exactly what you wanted to say... next time try to
use a larger vocabulary, incorperate so words you wouldnt normally think to use
also add some metaphors... they add imagery to the mind and really get the
reader into what you wrote... it was a str8 piece tho.. keep writing

__________________
<BR><h3><color=black><center><MARQUEE BEHAVIOR=scroll DIRECTION=left LOOP=infinite scrollamount=1 width=300>*~*~*Lady Wun*~*~*</MARQUEE></color></center></h3>
<BR>
<BR><MARQUEE BEHAVIOR=scroll DIRECTION=up LOOP=infinite scrollamount=1 height=100> <center><font color=000000><I>*~*~*~*~*</p>I'm invisible to the unseen eye</p>I'm undeniable strength</p>*~*~*~*~*~*</p>Merk Squad</MARQUEE></center><I>