man that was a different ending, i liked it, it ended the whole thing off very nicely. the structure of this was basic, the flow was alright, vocab was pretty good, the conten and detail were well written but room for lots more really, it told your story and put a picture in ppl's minds. emotions were there also. you kept it interesting by not dragging the topic out, but i felt it could have used a stronger opener.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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