mad mad mad emotion i fealt in this, really decent drop and kept me reading...
tha fact you used a story-like hook kept me wantin more til tha end and you never dropped off makin me read...
tha whole jar verse was wat caught my eye and wat makes this an exceptional piece, it was deep and gives me a major sense of emotion...
overall, tha mad feelin you put in this just makes tha drop jump off tha screen into my heart and that makes this flow all that much better, keep up tha work that is just like this and I'll keep reading...

9 / 10

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