..Flow..
Is all that comes to mind..
Sweet flow & structure.
Anyways on with the content.
You didnt really told a story but the array of words u used.
& must importantly how u used them, was nice.

Lines like these..
"electricity shortage, but yet the light still shines
no pulse, breaths gone, but still a working mind"

Just tell a little story..one by one..
I liked it.
A little small, but not less enjoyable..
Drop more!