Whats up Duck?
Draw a bar with this thread & seperate Tech from this wack herb...
Gone far to get some head but d/ring only elevates you back words!
alright opening.. Good follow through, metaphor in its dope. set could have been more
Your flows lack words ...your vocabs practically in shambles
Structure So poor ...he posted up in'a shack eatin Cambles
Eh, punchs are coming off weak here. Follow through wasnt much. set was alright but i didnt think it went any were with the follow through
Wins In scandals ...nothin but herb voters & noob challengers
Truth is... you only come hard lookin at homo nude calenders!
PLAYED, and the calender line sounds fimilar... the punchs over all werent that hard not much in direction either.... Ya DUCK
Just untalented ... it's a shame you have quality lyrics they're heated...
But that's only when absolutely nobody has to hear it or read it!
would have been a dope bar, except you killed the flow by adding the last to,.. other than that it was good.....
Ur rep receed's itself, leave u in worlds of pain blood seeps thru realms...
U weep & tell, nothin to show wore skin inside out to say u sleep in cells!
good line, more, metaphor is nice, the set needed a little rewording i thought
You need to go faster ...rhyme so slow I think you're brain dead....
Ur wordplays trash there... I dont have to mention it..it's plain said!
eh endign could have come over better...the punch is alright i guess
Over all i thought you lacked direction in your verse badly.
It came off generic, the flow was good, lacked alot on personals i thought. Metaphors were good, thought you had some alright ones..
Oh and before you run off saying a queer newbie statment like "get off my dick" get off yours and battle, lol look at who your facing.. Lol sup wicked, you tha same one at UF?
Duck
ill
You a lame bitch, and you wont be hard to kill
At rap, you’re sub-par, f’real...
opening could have been better i thought.. not much strength in them and lacked metaphor as well
...Just look up at your verse, that shit’s far from ill!
I got the 4 and You better duck when I buss this shit
Plus This is nothin’ big...
losing your rhyme scheme here.. flowed off i thought punchs arent really directing at all, lacking strength
...Cause, I’ll Black ya eye like my mother fuckin’ sig!
So Put it on the record; your not erasing this killing
Halfway through the battle...
heard it before i think.. punch is sorta of lacking.. metaphor was alright on the set, not feeling your structure though
....& You not facing me, nigga you facing the ceiling!
I aim to destroy this pig when I come into town
So to win this, I gotta’ dig deep...
eh, sort of flipped his bar in the opening// punch wasnt much, but could be building
...Yeah, deep enough to fit his fat ass in the ground!
You the type of nigga to die when I rejected ya writing
This battle is over....
not bad. good connecting. the punch lack though nothing went directed to dissing him, at least nothing hard
Cause I crossed you out when I connected ya hyphens!
Ask Carson from ya crew, he knows my flame is hot
Plus you had the key to victor...Until I changed the lock
dope ending. the over punch was ok, good personal, metaphor was a little played but still nice
I though you made up for alot towards the end, but i though your punchs could have been more directed to dissing him, could have used a little more personal init, the scheme was alright but i though how you rhymed trashed your structure.
Vote-Technician
Cmae with a better verse with punchs, strength was better and his metaphors was better... Ya DUCK