flow was... shoudl word on that.
but it was still workable in ur peice
hated how u used the topic tho.
i mean i dont like that ...its just
so lazy to me. your rhyme scheme
was alright and the wordchoice
could have been better. vocab
a little work on but overall the
peice was good, structure needs work
because a reader is reading not listnening
he sees things like
demostating true elements of an emcee,
prue form, mimcke of the d.i.t.c
different.
reader reads it as thats bad structure and
struggles with how it should sound...so
just put some dotts or something or drop the line
but thats a peice of info to ponder on
when ur reviewing/editing ur piece.

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