nice ending, you truly did wrap this up nicely
the flow was straight, and so was the structure
it was simple but the emotion was there as well
i like the concept that you have here, i do think that
the begining could've been stronger though
it seemed sort of as if thought were just being thrown out there, and then towards the end they all fell together, somtimes that works but it kind of took away from this piece
but i enjoyed it none the less
nice drop

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."