this was really good,
you had a strong opening, it drew me in to want to continue reading, the flow and the structure was perfect for the message and your style, every line had some strong emotion behind it, i think that added alot to the impact of the poem, you created a picture and took the reader with you along your journey, you stayed consistent and on topic throughout the whole piece and ended it lovely, leaving me shocked and pleased from a good read
nice work

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."