Critique from an actual battler.

Listen hoe.. Im gettin sick of all the attention for me your giving
Cant you see youve released 4 disses now.. And your still not winning

Okay, kinda weak

This bitch.. Has nothing better to do than sit and type out pointless disses
Cant you see fucking idiot, that all the punches youve thrown are misses

Garbage

You dont know.. You havent heard what people say about you behind your back
'Kaos Theory is an arrogant bastard'.. and.. 'Wise Ways really is wack'

Pointing out statements is a very weak punch...where's your wordplay/creativity etc?

Everybody hates you.. Do you want to know why two people just left your crew
Well.. Hate to break it to you son.. But those two dope heads left because of you

Thanks for the compliment...okay punch..poorly worded

This mother fucker tries and fails.. Like a retarded horse trying to jump a fence
After this you'll be dead and gone...
... So im speaking of you in the past tence

Pure shit

Even your own mother hates you.. But the only reason your not disowned
Is because you mother feels sorry for you...
... Always insists your not fat your just big boned

Wtf? no

Fat bastard and fast food eater.. All you do is put on weight
Your so love-struck by food...
... You think McDonalds is your fucking soul mate

Pretty shitty

Silly hoe.. Nobody listens to you at all.. Especially 'When You Speak'
Can tell you wrote your Open Mics...
... Because like you they are weak

Damn, this is hurting my eyes...bleh bleh bleh

By saying.. 'U just need to shut tha fuck up & shut ya wack mouth'.. You really took a gamble.. Just rolled the dice
But in my opinion you need to read it yourself...
... And take your own fucking advice

Wack

Nobody likes you.. You dumb fuck.. Why dont you wake up and see
You never used to drop Open Mics.. So quit it and stop tryin to be like me

Okay

Overall, horrible flow. Poor structure. Bad wording, major lack of creativity...weak punches.

Shit Diss. Don't get all happy Wise Ways, I'm critiquing yours next.