well thank for your opinion, like I said I'm real new, also a 17 year old white kid from a town of 7,000 in north Alberta... so for a newbie I don't think its that bad, defintely alot of room for improvement, thats why I posted it here in the first place, one thing though, I'm not creating my own words, alot of rappers mispronounce words to make them rhyme with words they shouldnt, personally I like it, P Diddy does it alot, Eminem does it, and while we're talking about creating words, Snoop Dogg comes into play, hey I'll just invent a whole language where every word ends with IZZLE, that way I can rhyme any word I want, I'm not dissing snoop dogg, I like him, but dope and rope? compared to automaticlya and onomatopeia (in case you don't know what that is, its a poetic term in which you write out a sound, like BOOM, or BAM which I used), I think thats a good rhyme, now the piece altogether might not be great, and there's room to elevate, I just said its my my best to date, so just give me real advice, like read more, thats what I wanna hear, not use single word perfect rhymes or whatever, dope and rope, that aint skill, everyone know that, and I ain't great like I said, I'm still new, but whatevs, just ur opinion I guess, long post eh..hahaha, thanks for helpin' out, peace