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Old 02-10-04, 05:54 AM   #12
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From: B.831
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Listen,I Hate To break it to you but im going wit the win/
Aines the voice of the street..sqeeze He gone wit the wind/
eh this opening could have been better.punch was alright but could have been alot better
Dog you on it again?? maxi Pads Are feminin/
they for bitches.... but then i can see the resemblence/
played bar. could have reworded and flowed a littlebetter
Mc Aines falls victim tryin to be what he cant/
Dog, you couldn't match my level if i gave you a hand/
played concept. the punch lacked to. it was there but could have been alot better
Listen,Its all in your mind only think your the best//
Turn your chest to jello have Bill Cosby scoop at ya chest/
eh, not bad i suppose.. but you could have come off alot better with the punch
You only blab at the mouth your words Hard to pronounce/
And after this your Name is gonna be hard to announce/
alright flow on it. but you needed moreof a punch in it over all
i'll make it hard to come out like you flow constipated/
stop the hatin' my flow phat better watch my weight/
flow is bad. you needed more of a punch. metaphor was basic
you a sight for sore eyes make starin' ache/
Dog your shit ear-a-tatin' lemme prepare the "H"/
heh, not bad accually. I saw what you were going for, to bad alot of cats that read this may not see the metaphor
Listen, youz a clown you belong in the circus/
you rhymes kinda like you life they both pretty worthless/
eh, this ending needed morei though. the punch is alright but isnt that hard really.
Over all you needed more personals in your verse along with a smoother flow and HARDer punchs to really give it that extra edge, yeamean?

oh no its super-man whose flyin with the larks..missed ur marks landed in a pool of sharks
course hes clark,talks big Shit for a dog with lil barks parks his mouth cuz the Shit he starts
um good multi. bout WAY over drawn i thought, regaurdless of the flow, you killed it, and not in a good way duke
you cant beat a poet and dont deny it cuz you know-it, ur out-written like your owned
u receved smoked rocks gettin stoned all alone, no dome cant even get your-self blown
um.. basic really i mean you flowing good but when it comes down to it thats all, the punchs lacked and the metaphors could have been alot better.
this cat doesnt spit he rides ass and swallows till the Cock in his mouth is out and fomed-hollow
he's fat, rolls till theres dried grass, he still wallows i go to a cave where ilnes lingers he still follows
eh, the set on this was alright i suppose. but the homosexuality is a play concept. but you had an alright spin off of it.follow through needed to be a little better
first battle against a dope mc ,u've got something to prove, cynically your not approved
i got nothin to lose,takes more to make me remove than my Cock stuck in ur bitches groove (pussy)(lol)
eh... really wasnt that laugh out load funny to me. there wasnt much of a directed punch ya know? the metaphor was eh.
numba one loss like salsa with-out the sauce, no draws for cause, plus you grown old like moss
pause, then restart the chaos cuz u have just as much to present as a bag with-out the santa-claus
ending was eh.. i thought you lacked on punchs again and it could have been more directed

Over all yes you took it with multis, but theres sites for that. You lacked on punchs and all the mutlis you put in there sort of killed the flow. you could have hit with more personals i thought..


Over all MC aines took this i though. he came with more punchs and multis. although you both lacked on personals.

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