ok this is a topic that gets done over and over again, and most of the time, they are all about the same. and even thou you used some phrases in your piece that you see alot, you still put in some unique stuff, and made it fairly interesting.emotion was strong, but could use alot more detail when trying to describe us something, use all your senses.structure and rhyme scheme were basic, but rhyming didnt come off forced, did over do it. vocab was simple, can always up that some. it was a nice read.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

__________________