its cool how this reads as if it were the drug taking. you got your thoughts across very strong in this piece i think, and made it interesting. i liked the whole idea of how you approached this topic, but i felt the beginning, structure wise, was better then the end of the piece. the opener was strong, and the ending of the story fit nicely. in a few lines the beats didnt even out, and would sound better with one less/more word, have to watch careful for those. flowed well. vocab could be brought up. content was good. detail was half way id say. all and all it was a strong nice read.

~Tera~
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