i dont know why this is getting slept on, its a pretty good piece. i dont think ive read anything else from you before, but after reading this im going to make sure i do. your detail and descriptions in this were well done. and i liked the whole idea about this piece, was very unique, and interesting. you had a good opener, kept it alive all the way throu, and ended it with a strong good ending. your content was good, you didnt drag it out and make it boring at all. your vocab was pretty good, structure was basic, flow worked, emotion was there. i felt you did an awsome job on this piece, the approach and look on the topic was what i liked most.

~Tera~
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