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Flyweight
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IP:
Very nice piece - you already know you're flow and vocab is nice. In this piece and the series as a whole you've portrayed the story very vividly - which is what I was talking about when I responded to your other piece. When I read this I feel like you were actually in this condition and writing things down as they happen. Your descriptions are vibrant - they come alive. In "X" it felt more like you were a historian recording past happenings - it just didn't strike me as being your pain - seemed more like a news report. Anyway nice work again.
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