Nice piece. Flow seemed on point to me. Vocab was suitable but could be elevated a bit. Also I think you could of expanded a bit on your point - but that's me - the general feeling seems to be that works should be kept to under 20 lines. Personally I think you're better than some of the people you admire. Keep it up.

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