I liked this one better than the first part. I see you have a story that seems to mix 28 Days Later with Bush behind a red button. Interesting.

The flow was dope and the story line was grasping. I'm enjoying this epic of yours....I'll read part III soon. I, too am writing a two parter, but am less consistent with the writing.

The opener was hooking....
"What man renames himself God and claims the axe of Thor,
and buries it in his thorax and poverty-scorched hapless shores?
Crimson lightning flashed, as acid splashed in smolderin’ rains
I carried my dying brother on my back, to ‘shoulder the pain’
The air was suffocated with snow, as white sheets split the sky.
Warm flakes of ash, without a storm break, whizzed on by.
"… Hell always looks prettier in Christmas time," "

Loving it.