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IP:
Good flow - presented your argument pretty well. Nice contrasts set up. I think it might be a little easier to read if didn't capitalize everything - just a thought. Oh yeah and I think it might come a little stronger if you took out the part at the top about people just talking about problems - 'cause in the end that makes it kinda ironic. Nice intelligent piece though - keep it up. Hit my "Broken Metamorphosis" if you can.
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