Kwizikz - get rid of centerin ya txt dawg.. it dont work rite an ruins the flow.. the 'fell off' an 'come up short' lines are madly played.. ya closin line didnt really make sense either.. but u had a few nice concepts there an ur def elevatin.. props kid..

Chapter - still too general at points in ya verse.. the metas are makin for coo punches but not bein personal consistantly kinda takes away from the flow.. havin said that, ya opener an closer were both pretty good.. wittiest lines of the battle.. jus work at bein personal thru out the entire verse an it'll help the overall flow..

VoTe = Chapter

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