there was emotion, just not alot of it. mostly because it wasnt articulate enough, its like being mute. I can see the words, i just dont feel the emotion. there was "realness" to this, by that i mean that it seems like this is how you really feel and how you are in real life. vocab wasnt too good, very plain and simple. an alright poem, u should have made it longer as an tribute to ure brother. overall, its an alright poem. seems you would have alot of inspiration.

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