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Old 02-11-04, 08:36 PM   #13
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Killa's verse
I'm Reversing the Normal Just by Serving The Chef..
everything Straight all but his Sex..Twist Oliver's Text..

Nice opener good play on his name..
Torn Like Wet Paper this faker gets Cut like shick Razor's..
Im sick of Bitch Haters..they Smashed Like Mashed Taters..

another decent punch..it connected in my opinion..
Re-arange Ya Features By taking you A-part
And still thinkin you Smart when your Looking Like Potatoe Head..

ehh..this was a weak punch, next time dont rhyme the last word of your set up line with a word in the middle of your punchline..
Im callin the Plays Im'a Hit N' run..Just Like Jose Cansacoe Did..

err..Im thinkin did was suppose to rhyume with head..but..the meta 4 in this line was decent..
Similar to Whites in College Hill..Kid your Getting Left Out..
Drama's too Intense for you..so Mommies Tit Just Popped Out!

I liked the set up, but the punchline was..err..<-----that explains it..
Played Pre-writ boring Flow..This reminds me of your's Son
Your Just a UseLess Presence Like a Kid left outta Four-Sum..

good, you finally redeemed yourself in this punch..good job, you were starting to fall-off for a sec..
I'ts an OxiMoron your Lyrics a Raging BoreSome..
I know this Kid and he's White..So it's Easy To Snort' Em

uhh..fake personal..weak closer...

Oliver's verse
My spits are like art hence mah nick name Mister Vincent Van Gough
Too bad i didnt invent glasses cuz i still cant seem to find Cali's flow

ehh,..weak ass opener, semi-weak punchline..
Killa Cali ur ass aint nutin more den a fag who is still learning how to spit
Can sum1 plz hook killa up wit sum accuracy cuz his punches dont seem 2 hit

weak set up.. decent punchline..
But the sperm does cuz he always has stains left on his double chin
Bitch da only thing ur ever killed was ur flow and chance to win

one of the best punches in your verse..kinda gay though..
Please help us all out by makin an actual flow by goin to rhymezone.com
Beacuse ur punches are more used den da condoms u used on ur own mom

somemore played shit..but average punch..Ive seen better from you..
I saw ur last battle, and i'd like to say please enough with the quotation marks
Forget about ur mom, bitch u couldn't even get laid by a blind bitch in da dark

nice closer..better than Killa's..so..you get points there..

overall..I will have to give this shit to Killa, more consistent punches..but...since Oliver is my crew I cant vote..but all I got to say is keep elevating..both of yall..and Killa..come try-out for my crew..peace..
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