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Old 02-12-04, 01:12 AM   #4
LyRiCaL GeEnUs
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Se7en~ you came with played lines again....nothing too creative....and more useless multis that didn't fit in as punches/metas/multis....Overall jus an ok verse....try and be more original in your rhymes....Seems like you jus threw words in there somwtimes jus so it would rhyme....

OutCome~ Stay away form sex/gay jokes as they are all mad played...Otherwise you threw somwe pretty decent personals and punches....try and shorten your lines a bit so they aren't so stretched.....metas were ok...but coulda been more creative...a good verse

Outcome wins this for a harder hitting verse...more of his punches/personals/metas landed

Please drop an honest vote here guys...it would be much appreciated http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113550