this was cool. Maybe a a spin on "The road not taken" I always thought Frost was talkin about two women in that poem. I enjoyed reading this. You're structure was excellent, you're topic's been played yet it was fresh. Good job, especially since it's your first time writing a piece in that story writing style, that's not my thing but if it was, I'd be feelin ' this. A few more story drops and you should have it down pact.Keep it up man.
thanks for the feedback, appreciate it.