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Originally Posted by Veloci-Rapper
sounds to me like you just like to rap things without making any
sense wutsoever. but believe me, there is nothing wrong with that
becuz honestly thats how i think all rappers/poets begin. they just
get the feel of the words. until they start to catch hold of the meaning.
thats when we all meet our lyrical peak. you'l get there sooner or later
if you just keep writing. remember, practice makes perfect.
keep it real. keep rhyming.
pz
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I understand what you mean, but im trying to get feed back on my structure or word play or concepts, not the subject, the topic and subject isn't there because i want people to give me feedback on the text alone, and the direction im coming from is more like a verse on a song about fights,
I felt this made good sense and would be on point for that kind of thing
I aint a rip this, im a rap bitch ~
And make like a womenisor at christmas
Im distant, with this shit, spit rhymes so ill
- i give aids to a deaf bitch!
And grab the lines of her death bed
and rip it.... rip-less.......
Sort of where im coming from is style simular to a d12 song or something - not biting or copieing, but in that kind of mind frame, But ofcourse, thanks alot for your feed back. But if your reading this, id appreciate it if you gave me feed back from a say ''extra verse of fight music kind o veiw'' if you understand what i mean, bare in mind i just wanted to know how my text was
as in...word play, flow and concept.. etc