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Old 02-12-04, 11:55 AM   #12
Oakley
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.:K:.
Fuck this coward smash you till your devoured…and leave him seeping,
Fuck wordplay cause that^ had more than your whole verse…
……………......…so kid keep dreaming……….
punch = 4
merk this kid for beefing...everything's against you..nothing for..
lyrical joker..your just pissing about...read the shit in bold..
.....................over to state wat you are......
punch,personal = 4
I guess it was your mum who first told you…………
…………………..that you were really special…………,
But to be honest man ive seen straighter fucking….. comeing from a homosexual,
metiphore,punch,wordplay = 6
K spitting into a mirror is the only way i’ll ever meet my match,
Me turning on you to face away..was the best ive seen you spit back,
-self hype,wordplay,punch = 6
Its special K…..kelloggs brand but im not that type of cereal killer,
I own this battle with the outline..and leave this bitch to add all filler,
-self hype,metiphore = 4

OK nuttin great. Was expecting more to be honest. You did have some creativity tho and 2 fairly decent bars. The mirror wordplay was you best line. It was good. Other than that a very average if not a little less. Also please kill the ....... I know I've heard it's a so called vet style, but you don't utilize it with your flo correctly and it hurt your verse.
Overall = 24

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Ill Testament
I Wanted This Due In 24 Hours, But .:K:. Needs A Week..*
Replaying My Words, Is The Closest Way Youd B Unique..**
personal,personal,punch = 7
Got A Straight Answer From Feeble..Get Better To Be Elite..***
Punches Bruise Ya Cheek, Yous A Dog, The Way He Bites Treats..
personal,multi,wordplay = 7
Like Fat Customers At McDonalds, .:K:. Really Wanted This Beef..****
Beat U With 6 Lines ^, Couldnt Steal This Win If You Were A Thief..
metiphore,wordplay,metiphore,-filler = 6
Told Him That I Didnt Want Beef, But He Really Wanted To Be Sick..*****
Thinking That You Hard? Please, Im Giving You This Loss Quick..
wordplay,punch = 5
He Knew That I'd Beat Him, So He Posted In The Guided Mode..
"Thats Impossible Sorry" "Can You Image Me Winning On Adobe?"******
-flo,punch,personal = 5

It's a good thing you had some explanations. However, don't tell me what's a hard punch. Ironicly it isn't, it doesnt even ryhme. You did have a nice verse tho. Nice combination of blows as far as wordplay,personal's, and punches. You did some good research and I think it payed off here. Good Job.
Overall = 30

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