this was wayyyyyyyyyyyy too friggin long, to be honest i only read half of it lol.. but i like the double rhyme scheme u started off with, some kool lines spotted some creativity, flow was pretty smooth could have been more complex.. not sure if i caught a topic but for the most part the scrypt was consistant, not a bad piece,, just very long lol holla back return the favor mein

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