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Old 02-12-04, 07:10 PM   #8
Oakley
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Posts: 255
From: Maryland
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hardhitter
I aim for mc anises' brain then let him hang from ventricle veins
Pencil his legs, til' I stencil his frame.. I told him he was wack-
-n' that's what he became
-vocab,punch,wordplay,multi,punch,-stretched = 5
Whos back is this fag attackin, til I wipe out my ashes from cigarettes
Hoistin him weak, "The Voice Of The Streetz"? dude, it's the internet..
-metiphore,personal = 3
I tell him to duck, he'd lunge his feet, I get paid for shit he dun for free
Alls I wanted to do was Sonn you.. but rb already gave me custody..
multi,-played,wordplay,-played = 3
We've had beef for awhile now, but hes from England-
-We know how these faggots are
n' you wanna talk original? Look at your fuckin avatar!..
personal,personal,-played = 5
wow, these rhymes inert.. n' looks like my time hurts
I told him to drop good, so he copy n' pasted my verse!
multi,-self hype,-played = 3
Herb.. it stops here.. done, through, ya diein dude
He disabled his record.. n' I've seen your shit-
-n' I agree, I would too if I were you.......
mulit,punch,personal,punch = 6

Good closer. But that was about it. Your lines have been used 100x. Very very un-original verse. Hence, the only original one got the highest score. Avatar personal can be used again and again and not be played, but you didn't put effort into the punch to make it any different from another avatar punch. The whole Son concept is way past played, actually I used a line quite similar in a battle you voted on earlier. As for the copy and paste, we all know computer concepts are played. Be more original.
Overall = 25

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mc aines
Blast this mard winnin faster than blind's Last-In-Cherades
I thought weight watchers chocalate was weak till I saw hard-hitters-barz
metiphore,punch,punch,wordplay,-flo = 5
Ram & scrape ya abusin ya son like ya father raped ya
Only time hard hitter cumz rough is when he wanks on sand paper
multi,punch,metiphore,-played,wordplay = 4
Bowl the fag and hit a strike like puttin holes in baghdad
Similar to firin dicks from mac's my punches leave ya with a swolen ass
metiphore,punch,punch,multi,metiphore,-flo = 5
Search for verses cause u aint serving no1 like dirty nurses
Ur lines are borin' like playa's chat up lines every gurl in a skirts heard it
multi,-played,-flo = 3
Murked the fake U lack a future like I burned your fate
Its heavy Vs light Bitch like fat cunts to the scales U need to learn your weight
mulit,metiphore,-wrong,metiphore = 4

Another extremely played verse. I've seen it all before nothing really original. Also you were wrong, he isnt a light weight he is a middle weight. The whole serving concept along with the cum lines are played to the max. Be original. Work on that.
Overall = 21

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Vote = hardhitter
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