Freeman
Imagine this.. Bitch.. You lie and have no technique
Even when your with your bum-buddies...
... You still come weak
personal,punch = 5
My verse will exterminate.. Leave you extinct like the 'doe-doe'
Hasnt anyone told you...
... Self-glorification is a no-no
metiphore,punch,-filler = 4
Im ripping up bitches.. Youve just stepped into the arena
This herb is so spotty...
... He is force fed Neutrogena
metiphore,wordplay,metiphore,punch = 7
Check first post^.. He really is hatin.. A loony toon
Drowning you in spit...
... Leave you stuck in a typhoon
personal,personal,metiphore,punch = 6
Dont trust you.. So bitch.. This is a real threat
Im hittin you, leavin' you stubbed out...
... Just like a cigarette
-filler,metiphore,punch = 5

OK verse. Nothing special, you had some really nice concepts in here though, if you had kept this consistant it would have been nice. The neutrogena line was very nice along with your closer, the cigarette line, even though the top half of it was basicly a filler. Just a little less filler would be my advice.
Overall = 29
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Teknique
see i was jus tryin to spare u n prolong the inevitable/
the death of the freeman, carcass leakin red n beat like da vegetable/ (beet- a dark red vegetable)
metiphore,punch = 5
rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n your bound 4 losin/
-indirect metiphore,multi,-flo = 2
had to do it, had to show u how to move correctly/
do u expect me to not swing back when a dude is in my face n tryin to check me/
-structure,-filler = 0
dont have to respect me/
just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bout to be called up/
-structure,-flo,metiphore = 2
cuz i dont need a weapon to do my work for me, trust i dont need an AK to spray/
10 knuckles its e-z, to leave freezy, in an i-c-u in da u-k/.....
punch,personal,-structure = 4

Alright. You showed potential with that first bar, but then you fell apart like a wet box in a rain storm. It seemed to me that you were to focused on the guns and not Freeman. You need to fix that. This isn't a topical on AK's. Your last bar was OK but still, you need to even up your structure.
Overall = 13
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Vote = Freeman

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