''nobody knows me, even my mother who named me//
i feel like the invisible man walking outside when its raining//
a changling, that looks like water colors washed off on a painting///''

I liked that imagery, but id say the peice lacked anything that braught me into it - like adding a name into one of the lines say of a famous person or something like that, i think those were your best lines, .....definatly liked them. I also never find any lyrics any good unless they make me laugh or have great metaphours. But thats just me so...