[QUOTE=Lyriclesolja]To whome it may concern,
watch and learn,
as I set this site on fire,
watch it burn,
as the flames get higher,
who wants a turn,
[QUOTE]


More of a chorus or something, to me atleast. seems like after that bar you did everything you could to keep the rhyme, you should try to change the rhyme or flip it when your out of things to say, and maybe change your structure to......

watch and learn, as I set this site on fire
watch it burn, as the flames get higher
who wants a turn..........?

^ so its more read-able, other then that you need to find a subject that YOU know alot about, something you do alot, so that YOU have something to say and really mean it, other then just rolling off lines that rhyme, give it meaning and make it funny, make sure its fresh too, oh and don't use same word twice unless its needed ''watch'', if you use it 2 times you may as well use it 5.... then hey presto, its a hook.