Unfortunately, the introduction was the worst part of your piece. . Hence, I had to force myself to read past that section; perhaps this is the reason for the lack of replies.

Anyway, this was an up and down showing. You'd have a stanza or two of conceptually sound, fundamentally sound, overall solid writing. Then, you'd have forced rhymes & bad content. Really, there were flashes of potential; unfortunately, the flashes were sporadic - in part due to the generic topic. Keep writing, & I wholeheartedly apologize for the lack of replies you've received. Post more up, I'll reply to almost all of them . . Don't get caught up in the site - go about your life first.

Peace ,
Quality.

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