shorty:your opener was obvious and simple, the punch barely tapped him. your structure was ayite. you need to build your vocabulary, cause name,lame, frame, tame....just doesn't cut it, your should crack a dictionary. you tried to use a multiple but it was played and obvious, I saw it coming before I even got to it, you need to sit back and think for a second, and use some creativity. you didn't have any wordplay, but then again, nobody ever seems to, so fuck that, your closer was I'm sorry to say this..awful..gun punches are really amature.....

black grenade:you had a sad opener as well, your vocabulary is very small, build on that. your punches were few and far between, plus plain, this battle wasn't any fucn to read..your structure was good though, it flowed decent enough so I was stutter stepping in my head...you had no multiples or wordplay..your closer was accually the best thing out of your whole verse, it was structured well, the sylables matched up, and the punch hit pretty hard........

you both need to practice a lot harder, if you plan on winning any battles..

since I have to vote.........I gotta go with black grenade...


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