virtuoso:your opener wasn't really any good, you tried to throw a punchline in the mix, but it just fell flat. your punches were simple and played ,but I did like the "no=ones seen you since" punch, nice hard hitter there. your structure was sort of fucked, but it still flowed good enough to make it an easy read..really wasnt any meta's, wordplay, or multiples....so lets get your closer.....it was pretty damaging, but not really enough you should be coming that hard in every line you type....keep at it..you'll elevate....

killaconceptz:your opener was played, and simple, but it did hit harder than virtuoso's..so good job on that..just try counting your sylables, so your lines stay equal. your punches were problematic for me as a reader, some of them didn't accually rhyme, especially the phone punch. that wasn't very good. you need to try being more creative...you had no mutiple,wordplay,or metaphors either...so it's closer time.....your closer was saddening, you need to up your vocabulary, cause that was just amature.........

vote virtuoso
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time to vote on mine
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