Nice piece man...
at the beginning, the flow was a little hard to catch, and your rhyming was forced in places. Not much multi-age or anything along those lines, but the two stories were really good.
The points of view were quite clear, the writer's voice was strong, and the connection between the two was evident. The third verse was cool, because it acted as a conclusion for the whole thing.
I think this would be a much better read if you had incorporated more of the technical aspects into it, but then, I sound like I hypocrite cause I don't incorporate them.
Nice piece Athiest =)

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