this was a really cool piece....you certainly have developed your own style.
the imagery was great, the way you described the water, and the cut and the shark, very nice. I liked your set up for the whole event, describing the girl's life. I just wish you had ended it in a better way...the ending was so abrupt, it didn't really lave an impression on me.
good piece though, just try to finish off your ideas as opposed to cutting them short.
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