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Old 02-14-04, 05:37 PM   #24
TheUnderRated
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I breath and cough on wet mics like it's an ENT throat culture
when Brethren loses he'll be pecked dead by lyrics of vultures
^meh this is a stupid punch ok first line though....
can't you hear it Brethren?........da winds scream through my mic
I've been optimistic not seein you in my win.. not even plain sight
^ok this was good wordplay but weak punches still man pick it up...
it seems dat Brethren is constantly flowing like a clogged up artery
beating me is practically chancing da powerball or odds of da lottery
^ok this is a good line nice meta4's ....an Ok punch 2nd line filler....
dis nigga only flows with his basketball and body floatin in da Michigan Lake
my lyrics toppling over dis nigga like leaves in da fall dat haven't seen a rake
^LOL you did not just rhyme lake and rake LOL omg no...NO
Brethren......ya already know dat i'm cold as an AK straight out of da ice chest
come with me to RB funeral home and pick out a "L" tombstone to put u to rest
^ok second line first line was filler....try not to talk about how good you are so much and just punch brethren more directly word....



Battle Me?! Your life rewinds and fast fowards, and path is 'lost but still clearer',
Check his battle, dude saying his name so much, I think he's jacking off to a mirror
^ehhe ok punch kinda alot of syallbles longer lines but if you can make it work....
Nashville?! The only way this dude gets a W is from the 'middle of noWhere',
'Little or no flare' left, battling me never works, like girls with titties, but no hair,
^hmm this is creative and weird....good first line...wordplay nice nice....
Probably a hillbilly, don't need to read his verse cause you 'reckon something'?,
Blasphamy, like multiple orgasm, Brethren's about to bring the 'second coming',
^meh this is border line sex spits its nice wordplay but meh...ok meta4
Spears leave you deader, crush you under weight, like 'piers do from pressure'
Write your verse on people's backs is the only way people are feeling your letters,
^this was a well thought out punch i think it might of been done b4 though...
What you trying to lose? This battle's impossible, so just say 'bye to the cruise',
I'll get five dudes to rip your verse clean, and stamp your head with 'Live Nudes'.
^Meh i didn't like the closer but overall good verse...

I think brethren took it because although he missed some punches he was throwin out so many ...and ak mixa had alot of filler try not to talk about yourself at all just bash the other guy ...hit this up guys pz...

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