This was pretty short and abrubt..but i see there is alot of emotion goin on there....i think you just need to flesh it out more....also the rhymes were pretty simple..not that its totally a bad thing....because too much complexity will just ruin you...but maybe thats just your style...im just giving you MY opinion....but keep at it, i see a hint of raw talent

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