i like the story, it was present throughout the whole song, the imagery was pretty good, a couple of nice metas "He stilled belived. and he tried so hard..
he belived he would walk a million miles.. if he could walk a yard"<---one imparticular.
spelling could of used a little work..interesting story with a consistent flow nice job...keep it up...post an honest vote on my battles...i want them closed

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