nice job right chea....

this shit was pretty ill man...the whole
story and concept were nice...with some great
standout lines..

"I held her hand tight, positively shivering with expectation
She spelled it out right, this wasn't love, this was recreation
But as the moment heated, my heart responded with force
My feelings defeated, second place in the pleasurable sports"

i forgot how to quote...but anyway...that shit was nice...
the ending also was very good..
i have nothing negative to say about this...except for the
italics...lol..but who gives a fuck about that?..
aanyway...good vocab...good transitions...peace