im glad u know this sucks, so i wont have to tell u that......

structure is horrible.......try writin the lyrics down the page instead of across......

ur rhyme scheme was pretty wack as well.........u ended ur first line wit back, and ur second wit shit..........i see no rhyme there.........then u ended the second to last line wit bitch, then ur last line wit u.......again, must i point out that they dont rhyme at all......

ur flow sucked as well.......try and make all ur lines around the same length, and eventually try and get the syllables almost the same in all of your lines.........

ur vocab was pretty basic........try and elevate that.......

and pick a topic worth writing about........this was just a bunch of random shit put together........you actually gotta think about somethin and put thought into it.....

overall this was a pretty bad drop......you need to put more time and thought into your next one........

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